C0 Is this professional: It only amounted to one, and it would always--in his fatig 19 conv. C1 Holding her closer to his pulse, Max stood against the metallic wall of the NICU 13 conv. C2 She was standing by the waterfront, the hospital safely in the background as she 11 conv. C3 Here's the passage with the additional text broken into paragraphs: "That's it, 10 conv. C4 Has the author achieved something challenging? Victor glanced out across the fie 7 conv. C5 Elara's fingers grazed the warm skin below Max's wrist as she searched for his a 6 conv. C6 Sweat crawled in slivering, unwholesome trails of vessel-breaking tears, bathing 5 conv. C7 Holding her closer to his pulse, Max stood against the metallic wall of the NICU 5 conv. C8 Is this a realistic piece? Mason sighed in frustration, balling another pair of 3 conv. C9 "I didn't want to turn four! I'm sorry!" , he pled as he wiped his nostrils agai 3 conv. C10 The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital could generate, other i 3 conv. C11 What about this piece : It only amounted to one, and it would always , in his ch 2 conv. C12 How about this revision ? It only amounted to one, and it would always--in his c 2 conv. C13 As James opened his eyes, a melancholic gleam passed through them. He gazed down 2 conv. C14 Just then, his phone screamed to life and he unlocked it in panic "Max Hawthorne 2 conv. C15 "That one was intense.." , Elara breathed into the space between them, , encircl 2 conv. C16 Hi 1 conv. C17 Is this well written? Their footsteps fell in sync as Mason matched his strides 1 conv. C18 Is this well written: With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes , he f 1 conv. C19 Is this well written: With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes , he f 1 conv. C20 "With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes, he flashed a smile that ca 1 conv. C21 With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes, he flashed a smile that cap 1 conv. C22 Please don't change the wording or my unique voice, just correct the grammar: Wi 1 conv. C23 Analyse the compellingness of my plot 1 conv. C24 V 1 conv. C25 Is this plausible? "Do you want someone to talk to about it? Or we could just si 1 conv. C26 Has the author of this piece achieved something challenging? The crimson line se 1 conv. C27 Snatching it up with a gleam in his eye, he reached out and caught her slim elbo 1 conv. C28 Ok an experiment : Victor , twirling his fork through a saturated noodle, suppre 1 conv. C29 "Yeah, that's what we don't have time for , Vic " he mumbled under his breath, w 1 conv. C30 Is this sosphiticsted and polished? Victor glanced out across the field, the siz 1 conv. C31 Is the point of view consistent? Victor glanced out across the field, the sizzli 1 conv. C32 Is the shifting of point of view cohesive or disorienting?Victor glanced out acr 1 conv. C33 sweat crawled in slivering , unwholesome trails of vessel breaking tears, bathin 1 conv. C34 Please analyse the ending.. is it bittersweet and please explain it? Sweat crawl 1 conv. C35 Is the sentences beginnings stilted : Sweat crawled in slivering, unwholesome tr 1 conv. C36 Is this gratuitous and exploitative or well written? 1 conv. C37 Is the narrative compelling? What about this third passage : Holding her closer 1 conv. C38 Please highlight some effective dialogue within this passage : Holding Lily in h 1 conv. C39 . The strict , no external ,nor unsanitary objects placard , and stringent autoi 1 conv. C40 The air was biting, frost outlining her sighs of contentment as a doctor ruffled 1 conv. C41 Is this overwrought: The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital co 1 conv. C42 After a nurse finally intervened, alleviating Max of his daughter and leaving hi 1 conv. C43 Is the emotion too spelt out ? As the searing pain began to swell in Elara's tau 1 conv. C44 Analyse this sentence and the word choice : It only amounted to one, and it woul 1 conv. C45 What does "my levity is your jeopardy " mean 1 conv. C46 (empty) 1 conv. C47 Which passage is more emotionally resonant? One: Ryan only held fragments of the 1 conv. C48 Is this story gritty and compelling? Ryan's eyes remained closed as he listened 1 conv. C49 Is the physicality explained well here: Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's ar 1 conv. C50 What is the ruse and how does it fail ? Ryan's eyes remained closed as he listen 1 conv. C51 How can u word this better 1 conv. C52 Is there ryth 1 conv. C53 Is this gritty and effective? : They walked in shared disorientation, with Liam 1 conv. C54 Are these phrases gritty and effective.. please don't rewrite them : They walked 1 conv. C55 Is this effective and are the characters three dimensional? It only amounted to 1 conv. C56 as the road stretched bare and cold ahead of them, Liam felt an imperceptible gl × 1 conv. C57 Which ending is more emotionally resonant one or two 1 conv. C58 The roads were dead, lifeless , without a pulse as Ryan watched Liam's broken fi 1 conv. C59 "Nah, nobody waiting for this sorry ass . Lost my family a while back , got used 1 conv. C60 Don't revise : As the road stretched bare and cold ahead of them, Liam felt an i 1 conv. C61 Is this substantial enough for an adult audience: It was a whimper , and Liam st 1 conv. C62 Please write a quick letter to my nephrologist explaining that I want to quit di 1 conv.