C0 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 28 conv. C1 How about this : Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen , 23 conv. C2 Here's a scene based on a prompt to put my character in a graveyard in the snow: 16 conv. C3 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt 16 conv. C4 Is this better? Maybe it amounted to nothing-after hours of rotting in the dayli 15 conv. C5 "Liam's hair, laden with splinters of ice and snow, stuck out from his low-slung 15 conv. C6 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 14 conv. C7 Is this written at an advanced level: "Ah Ryan, you're a handsome bastard for su 13 conv. C8 Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes lighting with 11 conv. C9 Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm twilight rays 11 conv. C10 Is this dialogue realistic? "Ah Ryan, you're a good-lookin' bastard , from the c 10 conv. C11 Is this an idealised portrayal: But you said mine is too idealised ok, what if i 9 conv. C12 How is this piece of writing : As he opened his eyes , his pulse was in his thro 8 conv. C13 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w 7 conv. C14 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w 6 conv. C15 The sub-zero teeth pierced his flesh as the flare of saline bled through his por 5 conv. C16 Maybe it was the lack of heat on his skin, after hours of drowning in the sunlig 5 conv. C17 due to Elara's pregnancy being smooth sailing and healthy, if not deeply sensual 4 conv. C18 Hey, where's your mom and dad , huh? " Ryan asked, the girl's tiny amber irises 3 conv. C19 As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te 3 conv. C20 His aching skull, enraged with the pulse of rising nausea, slumped against the s 3 conv. C21 Is this smooth : Liam collapsed into the unforgiving embrace of the concrete, hi 3 conv. C22 Please don't finish it "That scar , I wasn't conscious when they-. " As if expec 2 conv. C23 Valen's voice filtered into the depths of Ryan's pleading body as his boots were 2 conv. C24 Is the use and failure of the pipe plausible Maybe it amounted to nothing-after 2 conv. C25 She nodded, biting her lip as she drew a quiet strength from deep within her abd 2 conv. C26 Do the metaphors add to the narrative without clouding it?: As Valen suctioned h 2 conv. C27 His eyes burnt with the heat radiating through his vision , as he was forced int 2 conv. C28 "Well, seeing as I'm here , and you still look as terrible as you did before-hit 2 conv. C29 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 2 conv. C30 Is this narrative inspiring.. should I aim to write like this author ? Cartridge 2 conv. C31 His eyes scanned the horizon in deportation, his spine wracked with shivers as h 2 conv. C32 His gaze wandered from his shaking hands and out onto horizon, trailing the star 1 conv. C33 Liam , working tirelessly at the thick rope around Victors torso , mouthed a few 1 conv. C34 The hose scene is fessble ? Liam gave a measured response. "Well I can get throu 1 conv. C35 Is well written? "I'll hold you still , you only have to concentrate on breathin 1 conv. C36 Please write the rest of this scene :Liam ran a steady hand across Elena's navel 1 conv. C37 Please highlight the intense parts : She panted hard, letting herself finally gi 1 conv. C38 "Well you better keep that breathing steady for me , I can't stall this any long 1 conv. C39 Ryan's hazel aspect shone with flecks of illumination as he said "you never actu 1 conv. C40 She returned Liam's hand to continue the familiar build to the junction of pleas 1 conv. C41 Liam felt the bed rail shake with her hands as she collapsed against the side. " × 1 conv. C42 A lingering testament to the sound of unease , the embodiment of reckless abando 1 conv. C43 In the dim light, Valen found a twisted kind of solace, toying with the cavity o 1 conv. C44 Which passage is of a profession calibre .. this one? In the dim light, Valen fo 1 conv. C45 Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet came to a nullification of movement as 1 conv. C46 It had been warm, yet pleasant , embalming them both in a magenta twilight. In t 1 conv. C47 Are there varied sentence openings? Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet cam 1 conv. C48 As Ryan dragged his thighs through the shards of debris, the blood saturating hi 1 conv. C49 Which is more resonant , one or two : ONE : Ryan hauled his torso through the sp 1 conv. C50 Does this avoid melodrama and stick to realism? Here's a scene based on a prompt 1 conv. C51 " Morning , Lily , you must be wondering where Daddy went, or where Mommy is hid 1 conv. C52 Is it overwrought or precise in it's language use : Ryan hauled his torso throug 1 conv. C53 What are some interesting prompts for my characters, like situations I can plot 1 conv. C54 rate the sentence 1 conv. C55 Is there heartache depicted in this narrative: His eyes burnt with the heat radi 1 conv. C56 His acuity, melting into the atmosphere, left him with no other thoughts. 'You r 1 conv. C57 Here Valen taunts Liam with the possibility of having blinded Ryan .. isn't that 1 conv. C58 "Yeah they are-you've been in labour for 17 hours now, and you're doing such bea 1 conv. C59 Passage one "In the waning light, Liam's battle against the encroaching darkness 1 conv. C60 Does this passage exhibit maturity in writing ? Singer Here's an attempt at natu 1 conv. C61 Liam's breath , an unsteady exhale in the dark, dragged against his throat. The 1 conv. C62 Liam's eyes flickered with the discolouration of imploring deception as he said 1 conv. C63 Which is mis compelling 1 conv. C64 Cartridge What author would you compare this to direct or is it highly distincti 1 conv. C65 His aching skull, enraged with the pulse of rising nausea, intercepted with the 1 conv. C66 "Liam, just continue, can't have you both on the brink of -" There was a quiet b 1 conv. C67 Is this authors style gritty and impactful: Masonry Liam's hair, laden with spli 1 conv. C68 Protector : Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet came to a nullification of 1 conv. C69 Which is most resort as an ending : Protector : Ryan came into focus , and his b 1 conv. C70 Is this written at high skill level or a low skill level? Help me--No. No," he p 1 conv. C71 Is this advanced and of professional calibre? But the voice persisted, causing L 1 conv. C72 Does this flow well, don't revise: "As they walked in disorientation, Liam was m 1 conv. C73 : In the twilight haze, Ethans' eyes flew open , the saccharine , psychotropic c 1 conv. C74 Which version is better written One :"Oh, God, I threw up the contraband--those 1 conv. C75 G 1 conv. C76 Please break my passage into paragraphs like yours but don't rephrase 1 conv. C77 Please comment and the naturalism of the dialogue: Leaning into her touch as her 1 conv. C78 Leaning into her touch as her fingers moved to the tender spot between his earlo 1 conv. C79 Good balance of realism and whimsy? Ah Ryan, you're handsome sure, from the coll 1 conv. C80 Is this gritty and real? : Ah Ryan, you're handsome sure, from the collarbones u 1 conv. C81 I want to share two passages for comparison in tone and to see if they fit toget 1 conv. C82 Please highlight effective phrases that are natural and not dramatic: "Ah Ryan, 1 conv. C83 Is this raw and real Singer Here's an attempt at natural dialogue surrounding gr 1 conv. C84 (empty) 1 conv. C85 (empty) 1 conv. C86 (empty) 1 conv.