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3 fiction conversations
over 3 months, 4 days
(Jan 27, 2024 – Apr 30, 2024)
Queensland, Australia
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Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t
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Is this written at an advanced level: "Ah Ryan, you're a handsome bastard for su
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Here's a scene based on a promo to put my character in a graveyard in the snow:
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Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt
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As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t
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Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen , the deep pressure
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Is this better? Maybe it amounted to nothing-after hours of rotting in the dayli
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Holding her closer to his pulse, Max stood against the metallic wall of the NICU
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Is this an idealised portrayal: But you said mine is too idealised ok, what if i
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"Liam's hair, laden with splinters of ice and snow, stuck out from his low-slung
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She was standing by the waterfront, the hospital safely in the background as she
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Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm twilight rays
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Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet came to a nullification of movement as
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Here's the passage with the additional text broken into paragraphs: "That's it,
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Please assess this as is : Victor glanced out across the field , the sizzling he
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Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes lighting with
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Sweat crawled in slivering, unwholesome trails of vessel-breaking tears, bathing
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His gaze wandered from his shaking hands and out onto horizon, trailing the star
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How is this piece of writing : As he opened his eyes , his pulse was in his thro
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As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te
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As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w
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:Elara's fingers grazed the warm skin below Max's wrist, as she searched for his
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Are Ryan and Liam distinct : Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm firmly, s
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The sub-zero teeth pierced his flesh as the flare of saline bled through his por
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Filtered As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , d
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As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w
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Protector : Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet came to a nullification of
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With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes, he flashed a smile that cap
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Could this be a published work ? It only amounted to one, and it would always--i
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Holding her closer to his pulse, Max stood against the metallic wall of the NICU
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Liam collapsed into the unforgiving embrace of the concrete, his ravaged body we
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As he approached , her ears flattened against her head, her sable fur absent in
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Maybe it was the lack of heat on his skin, after hours of drowning in the sunlig
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due to Elara's pregnancy being smooth sailing and healthy, if not deeply sensual
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She nodded, biting her lip as she drew a quiet strength from deep within her abd
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It only amounted to one, and it would always , in his chlorophyll soaked corneas
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Is this a realistic piece? Mason sighed in frustration, balling another pair of
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Hey, where's your mom and dad , huh? " Ryan asked, the girl's tiny amber irises
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His aching skull, enraged with the pulse of rising nausea, slumped against the s
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"I didn't want to turn four! I'm sorry!" , he pled as he wiped his nostrils agai
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Just then, his phone screamed to life and he unlocked it in panic "Max Hawthorne
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The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital could generate, other i
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The roads were dead, lifeless , without a pulse as Ryan watched Liam's broken fi
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Please highlight effective descriptions and dialogue: "The sight of his crumpled
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Please don't finish it "That scar , I wasn't conscious when they-. " As if expec
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Valen's voice filtered into the depths of Ryan's pleading body as his boots were
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How about this : Lara felt the agony crescendo through her tightening abdomen ,
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. "The shoulders are on a bit of an angle , Lara this is a perfectly normal, but
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Do the metaphors add to the narrative without clouding it?: As Valen suctioned h
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Is this well written ? His eyes burnt with the heat radiating through his vision
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"No, because .... You're worth that kid's trust , her missing you everyday , thi
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"Well, seeing as I'm here , and you still look as terrible as you did before-hit
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As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t
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Is this narrative inspiring.. should I aim to write like this author ? Cartridge
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Hi
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Please assess this passage : The crimson line seared across the horizon, suffoca
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As James opened his eyes, a melancholic gleam passed through them. He gazed down
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Please rate the level of craftsmanship in this passage: Now compare this version
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The air was biting, frost outlining her sighs of contentment as a doctor ruffled
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Three months had passed, and Max had finally travelled across the country with h
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"That one was intense.." , Elara breathed into the space between them, , encircl
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Dialogue Nah, nobody waiting for this sorry ass . Lost my family a while back ,
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"You know , we could just let them gain on us, and pretend we were dropped here.
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Listening as terror flooded the membranes behind his closed lids, their voices e
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Are Ryan and Liam distinct? It only amounted to one, and it would always be one
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Is this well worded As the road stretched bare and cold ahead of them, Liam felt
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Is this realistic and not too romantic trope : I went through quite the ordeal ,
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His eyes scanned the horizon in deportation, his spine wracked with shivers as h
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Her eyes were deflecting the neon light as she penetrated his gaze, "tell me som
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Which version is more resonant : one : As Liam integrated his eyes with the dire
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Is this effective and well written: As Liam directed his eyes in the direction o
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Please break down how Ryan preserves Liam's dignity and helps him : Filter It on
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Maybe it was the lack of heat on his skin, after hours of drowning in the sunlig
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Liam , working tirelessly at the thick rope around Victors torso , mouthed a few
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The hose scene is fessble ? Liam gave a measured response. "Well I can get throu
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Is well written? "I'll hold you still , you only have to concentrate on breathin
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As the chill of water cascaded over Ryan's thighs , he lifted Victor's head into
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Please write the rest of this scene :Liam ran a steady hand across Elena's navel
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Please write a bitch scene including details from this passage: due to Elara's p
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Please highlight the intense parts : She panted hard, letting herself finally gi
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"Well you better keep that breathing steady for me , I can't stall this any long
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Ryan's hazel aspect shone with flecks of illumination as he said "you never actu
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She returned Liam's hand to continue the familiar build to the junction of pleas
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Is this realistic : The nurse said, turning the shoulder as Lara's cervix contin
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As she went with the push, her fingers found the curves that needed her touch ,
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Is Lila and Lily's deliveries medically accurate: Releasing a controlled, soft m
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How is the shoulder issue explained realistically: Releasing a controlled, soft
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Is the dramatised aspect ok for fiction: Releasing a controlled, soft moan , she
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"How, on earth, was the baby not detectable during her actual labor, there was o
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Liam felt the bed rail shake with her hands as she collapsed against the side. "
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Is this hug well written? Ryan pulled Liam into a hug that burned with regret ,
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A lingering testament to the sound of unease , the embodiment of reckless abando
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In the dim light, Valen found a twisted kind of solace, toying with the cavity o
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Which passage is of a profession calibre .. this one? In the dim light, Valen fo
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This passage is unreadable? Or readable ? Filtered As Valen suctioned his saliva
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It had been warm, yet pleasant , embalming them both in a magenta twilight. In t
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Are there varied sentence openings? Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet cam
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"Ryan is silent , is he not ? And somehow , he's been a bystander . Watching it
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Here's a prompt to make my character have a drunk argument with a family member
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As Ryan dragged his thighs through the shards of debris, the blood saturating hi
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Which is more resonate : passage one : As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rub
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Which is more resonant , one or two : ONE : Ryan hauled his torso through the sp
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Is the narrative complex: a duck went quack
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His eyes burnt with the heat radiating through his vision , as he was forced int
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" Morning , Lily , you must be wondering where Daddy went, or where Mommy is hid
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"Valen, you know Liam is starting to piss me the hell off... well to be dramatic
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Is it overwrought or precise in it's language use : Ryan hauled his torso throug
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What are some interesting prompts for my characters, like situations I can plot
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rate the sentence
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Is the sentence good As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse
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Please breakdown how Lara's grace is shown in each piece : "Yeah they are-you've
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Is there heartache depicted in this narrative: His eyes burnt with the heat radi
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His acuity, melting into the atmosphere, left him with no other thoughts. 'You r
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Here Valen taunts Liam with the possibility of having blinded Ryan .. isn't that
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What dialogue is realistic? "Moan through it baby, I'm right here" he whispered,
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"Yeah they are-you've been in labour for 17 hours now, and you're doing such bea
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Passage one "In the waning light, Liam's battle against the encroaching darkness
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Does this passage exhibit maturity in writing ? Singer Here's an attempt at natu
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Does this seem like a real conversation: "Well, seeing as , I'm here , and you s
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Liam's breath , an unsteady exhale in the dark, dragged against his throat. The
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Liam's eyes flickered with the discolouration of imploring deception as he said
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Which is mis compelling
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Cartridge What author would you compare this to direct or is it highly distincti
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His aching skull, enraged with the pulse of rising nausea, intercepted with the
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"Liam, just continue, can't have you both on the brink of -" There was a quiet b
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Which is most resort as an ending : Protector : Ryan came into focus , and his b
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His rasping lullaby was eerie in the silence , and his heartbeat twisted as he h
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Is this well written? Their footsteps fell in sync as Mason matched his strides
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Is this well written: With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes , he f
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Is this well written: With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes , he f
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"With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes, he flashed a smile that ca
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Please don't change the wording or my unique voice, just correct the grammar: Wi
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Ryan's complexion, draining of color, almost revealed a two-digit number. "Eleve
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Please analyse: look like hell, but we can get out of here." The air was unrelen
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Analyse the compellingness of my plot
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Is this plausible? "Do you want someone to talk to about it? Or we could just si
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Is this plausible : Ethan's knuckles dug further into the denim of his jeans , h
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Snatching it up with a gleam in his eye, he reached out and caught her slim elbo
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Ok an experiment : Victor , twirling his fork through a saturated noodle, suppre
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"Yeah, that's what we don't have time for , Vic " he mumbled under his breath, w
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Is this sosphiticsted and polished? Victor glanced out across the field, the siz
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Is the point of view consistent? Victor glanced out across the field, the sizzli
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Is the shifting of point of view cohesive or disorienting?Victor glanced out acr
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sweat crawled in slivering , unwholesome trails of vessel breaking tears, bathin
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Could the pacing and density be an acceptable stylistic choice: Sweat crawled in
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Please analyse the ending.. is it bittersweet and please explain it? Sweat crawl
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Is the sentences beginnings stilted : Sweat crawled in slivering, unwholesome tr
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Is this gratuitous and exploitative or well written?
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Does this passage show excellent craftsmanship? : What about this third passage
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Is the narrative compelling? What about this third passage : Holding her closer
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Please highlight some effective dialogue within this passage : Holding Lily in h
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An icon blinked on his phone, a message from Sam, and he scrolled through the up
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. The strict , no external ,nor unsanitary objects placard , and stringent autoi
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The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital could generate, other i
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Is this realistic and powerful? As Elara's primal effort reverberated through Ma
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Is this dialogue natural:He interrupted her, anger and frustration gnawing at hi
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Compare my style :Elara's fingers grazed the warm skin below Max's wrist as she
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Is this overwrought: The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital co
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Is the dialogue natural? The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospita
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Point out real and effective moments: Looking into her eyes with a mix of empath
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After a nurse finally intervened, alleviating Max of his daughter and leaving hi
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Analyse this sentence and the word choice : It only amounted to one, and it woul
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What does "my levity is your jeopardy " mean
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Which passage is more emotionally resonant? One: Ryan only held fragments of the
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Is this story gritty and compelling? Ryan's eyes remained closed as he listened
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Liam's jaw clenched as he whispered "Please help me-", flinching as the sight of
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Does the flash back make sense
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Is the physicality explained well here: Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's ar
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What is the ruse and how does it fail ? Ryan's eyes remained closed as he listen
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How can u word this better
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Is there ryth
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Is this gritty and effective? : They walked in shared disorientation, with Liam
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Are these phrases gritty and effective.. please don't rewrite them : They walked
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Is this gritty and effective As Liam writhed in the dying sunlight, his skin eru
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I feel the vomiting needs to be mentioned as much as it does and can't be pared
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Is this dialogue effective: The air was unrelenting in its suctioning nature, st
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Are Liam and Ryan's voices distinct Listening as terror flooded the membranes be
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Is this effective and are the characters three dimensional? It only amounted to
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as the road stretched bare and cold ahead of them, Liam felt an imperceptible gl
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Which ending is more emotionally resonant one or two
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Is this gritty and real or too flowery : Ryan came into focus , and his bare fee
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Is the dialogue natural?
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Is this well worded : Liam , screaming through his gag, purged the contraband an
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Don't revise : As the road stretched bare and cold ahead of them, Liam felt an i
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Is this substantial enough for an adult audience: It was a whimper , and Liam st
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Point out poignant moments that I Coukd expand up . Don't do it for me : Ryan ca
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Are the names Liam and Ryan good for two best friends in a thriller story
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Is this written at high skill level or a low skill level? Help me--No. No," he p
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Does this revised piece have a good balance of adjectives and adverbs : It only
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Are the verbs strong? ian-deng/ChatGPT Chatbot Does this revised piece have a go
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Is this unprofessional because of overuse of description? The present The air wa
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The air was unrelenting, stripping the moisture from their skin as they navigate
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Have I employed implication and subtext effectively: Ryan rested his hand upon L
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Is this advanced and of professional calibre? But the voice persisted, causing L
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Does this flow well, don't revise: "As they walked in disorientation, Liam was m
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: In the twilight haze, Ethans' eyes flew open , the saccharine , psychotropic c
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Which version is better written One :"Oh, God, I threw up the contraband--those
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Is this sentence effective, don't rephrase: "Hell yeah , you don't " Liam's smat
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Are these phrases effective? "Liam, I don't know that I'm above crawling in ther
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Please break my passage into paragraphs like yours but don't rephrase
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Please comment and the naturalism of the dialogue: Leaning into her touch as her
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Leaning into her touch as her fingers moved to the tender spot between his earlo
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Is it interesting that she doesn't take up Liam's proposition to leave but leave
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Quite natural and effective moments rm Availability) If this app doesn't respond
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I want to share two passages for comparison in tone and to see if they fit toget
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As his words dangled on fibrous threading of vulnerable yearning, he edged his f
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Please write a quick letter to my nephrologist explaining that I want to quit di
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3 conversations in cluster Cluster 42× “The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital cou...” over 1 hour (Feb 22, 2024 – Feb 22, 2024), oldest first.
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USER: The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital could generate, other infants crying in distress, machines sounding off alarms, paediatricians rushing to save the lives of fragile babies; Max barely registered it anymore. It was a subtle background noise that he'd grown used to . Lily was finally five months old , and possessing the strength and vitality of the median three month old child. A milestone in itself. Or , at least it seemed that way, considering she'd been born a month early, and all the staff kept commenting on the improbable nature of her thriving. But when she did, she thrived harder than any kid he'd seen. "My bean is now a little cucumber." he commented as he admired how far she'd progressed, and she unleashed a laugh into the air. Max gave a chuckle as his readjusted the squirming Lily in his lap. "Finally, we're going home , all the way back to California. And Mr bear her gets the aisle seat , huh?" Max winked at Lily, her entire face lighting up with the promise of a jovial, healthy day, with her respiration having the all clear and her eyes sparkling with life. It was a stark comparison to her first days . "Laugh away bean, the sound is glorious, I bet it could actually cure some cancer, send some kids home" . He was only half joking , with the NICU being the sterile environment that it was, with no glimmers of optimism or joy. "Ah, you don't know where you are anyway, of course you'll be happy enough in this place". Max contemplated how her age...
CHATBOT: Max's narrative captures the essence of a father's resilience and love amidst the trying circumstances of a neonatal intensive care unit (NICU). As he stands in the tumult of beeping machines and medical urgency, his focus is singular--Lily, the little warrior who's defied odds and emerged stronger than expected. These moments at the hospital have become a norm for him, signaling both the hardships and victories of Lily's early battle for life. The term "disquiet" sets the scene of a place that never sleeps, always vigilant, where every second could be a turning point for the fragile infants within. Five months have wrought significant change. Lily, born a month premature, has now caught up to the strength and vitality that would be expected of a baby three months post-term--a testament to her incredible journey and perhaps the dedicated care at the NICU. Max's endearment for his daughter evolves from "bean" to a "little cucumber," symbolizing her growth and resilience. These nicknames are more than mere words; they're milestones, marking her progress in a way that charts not only her physical but also her emotional and developmental growth. Preparations are underway for their departure to California, a sign that their stay in the NICU is coming to a hopeful end. Through the way Max converses with Lily about mundane future tasks like washing clothes and dry cleaning the shirt she soiled, readers can sense his grounded approach to parenthood and life's everyday realities amidst extraordinary circumstances. References to Max resuming his degree at Stanford reveal his own paused aspirations, overshadowed by the immediate needs of his daughter. This speaks to the sacrifices inherent in caring for a sick child, where personal goals often take a back seat. The narrative hints at a complex past relationship with Elara, whose absence is felt by Max. Yet this void is filled by Lily's laughter, a sound that seems to bring light to the sterile, metallic corridors of the hospital, acknowledged with warmth by the staff. Max's interaction with Lily, guiding her in a wave for the admiring medical staff, shows his awareness of establishing connections and offering gratitude for the care received, as well as his desire for Lily to engage with the world around her. The practicalities of life with a recovering baby are not forgotten--the car seat adjustments, the medications to retrieve, a testament to the new, careful choreography of their lives. Finally, the conversation w...
USER: The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital could generate, other infants crying in distress, machines sounding off alarms, paediatricians rushing to save the lives of fragile babies; Max barely registered it anymore. It was a subtle background noise that he'd grown used to . Lily was finally five months old , and possessing the strength and vitality of the median three month old child. A milestone in itself. Or , at least it seemed that way, considering she'd been born a month early, and all the staff kept commenting on the improbable nature of her thriving. But when she did, she thrived harder than any kid he'd seen. "My bean is now a little cucumber." he commented as he admired how far she'd progressed, and she unleashed a laugh into the air. Max gave a chuckle as his readjusted the squirming Lily in his lap. "Finally, we're going home , all the way back to California. And Mr bear her gets the aisle seat , huh?" Max winked at Lily, her entire face lighting up with the promise of a jovial, healthy day, with her respiration having the all clear and her eyes sparkling with life. It was a stark comparison to her first days . "Laugh away bean, the sound is glorious, I bet it could actually cure some cancer, send some kids home" . He was only half joking , with the NICU being the sterile environment that it was, with no glimmers of optimism or joy. "Ah, you don't know where you are anyway, of course you'll be happy enough in this place". Max contemplated how her age made it all so simple. "You'll be just fine while your old man here tends to some boring adult chores. I gotta was my clothes...pack my attire and dry clean that one shirt you vomited on. " Max meandered before typing a reminder into his phone . "Call Stanford . I'll have to resume my degree when we get home. Daddy's been so busy with your health issues he forgot about college." "And Elara... it's not as if I don't think about her, and how I walked away from her. Am I the asshole, leaving her well she seemed so torn? It doesn't matter , because it's you and me kiddo, and that's all there is to it. " Her next laugh rang out through the metallic halls , attracting the appreciative smiles of passing medical staff who called out as they steered antiseptic disposal bins, "ah, what a beautiful laugh , Miss Hawthorne!" Came a blustering voice, and the moment was a welcome change of pace. Max, propping her up on his lap, gently lifted her hand, guiding it in a wave that resembled the playful twist of a light bulb being screwed in . "Wave , princess, you have admirers it seems. Got some big shoes to fill huh? " Letting her arm fall back to her side, she flailed in excitement, grabbing at his shirt and scrunching it in her grasp. "You're really perking up, I waited so long for this..." . As his phone lit up with discharge instructions and digital flyers from various social service links , bombarding his eyes with all the information. It was an hour's drive to the airport, and his mind drifted to his earlier wrestle with Lily's car seat. At least it was roadworthy, if a little askew , her blanket stuffed into place so she'd be warm enough. Then the outstretched list of medications he needed to collect from the pharmacy gnawed at his fidgeting hands , as he turned his focus back to his overstimulated daughter, begging for his attention with her every manoeuvre. "Alright, alright, that's enough outta you, wriggler." His own laughter sprinkled over hers , interspersed and forming a harmonious sound that reverberated on the metal walls. Finally , he answered an incoming call from Sam, "Hey man, how've you been? Yeah , saw the photos , I'm happy for you all , man. Yeah she's being discharged in a couple of days. Nah, can't get my head around it either. Elara? Well it's not as if I don't love her. It was only months ago when she suffered premature labour scares-yeah , and the morning sickness , more like permanent sickness. Well , Sam, I do still love herBut the day is nearly here . I wasn't her to walk through that door more than anything , but I never had what I can give Lily . That kid has grit, damn she fights and - yeah it's complicated that's an understatement.. I'm glad to hear James and Maddy are doing so well. You take care ".
CHATBOT: Max's interaction with his daughter Lily and his phone call with Sam paint a vivid picture of life's complexities and the small victories that come with them. Despite the immensity of a hospital's activity and the daunting challenges he's faced as a parent to a premature infant in a neonatal intensive care unit, Max finds solace in the development and strength of his daughter. The "three am bustle" of the hospital has become white noise to him, a testament to the resilience and adaptation he's developed over the last five months. Lily, once fragile and fighting for life, is now a beacon of progress, her laughs providing a rare melody of joy in the usually sterile and tense NICU environment. Her vitality and the hope of returning home to California bring a semblance of normalcy to Max's life, which has been on hold. The bittersweet reality of resuming his own life, returning to college, and tending to everyday tasks like laundry, packing, and dealing with the remnants of Lily's earlier struggles (like cleaning a vomited-on shirt), are interwoven with the internal conflict he feels about leaving Elara. The mix of personal reflections, logistical planning, and the mundane details of preparing for discharge from the hospital creates an authentic glimpse into the life of a parent navigating the aftermath of critical healthcare. Max's life is filled with call reminders, medication lists, and car seat adjustments, yet these are punctuated by the pure expressions of Lily's developing personality and her interaction with the staff around her. The passage ends on a hopeful note, with an incoming call from Sam who appears to be checking-in and updating Max on others in their shared circle of friends or family. This conversation underscores the interconnectedness of life's experiences, with Sam's news about James and Maddy, and Max sharing about Lily's imminent discharge. It's a snapshot of shared human experiences, the intimate moments of connection, and the support networks that form around us in times of need.
USER: The disquiet of the three am bustle that only a hospital could generate, other infants crying in distress, machines sounding off alarms, paediatricians rushing to save the lives of fragile babies; Max barely registered it anymore. It was a subtle background noise that he'd grown used to . Lily was finally five months old , and possessing the strength and vitality of the median three month old child. A milestone in itself. Or , at least it seemed that way, considering she'd been born a month early, and all the staff kept commenting on the improbable nature of her thriving. But when she did, she thrived harder than any kid he'd seen. "My bean is now a little cucumber." he commented as he admired how far she'd progressed, and she unleashed a laugh into the air. Max gave a chuckle as his readjusted the squirming Lily in his lap. "Finally, we're going home , all the way back to California. And Mr bear her gets the aisle seat , huh?" Max winked at Lily, her entire face lighting up with the promise of a jovial, healthy day, with her respiration having the all clear and her eyes sparkling with life. It was a stark comparison to her first days . "Laugh away bean, the sound is glorious, I bet it could actually cure some cancer, send some kids home" . He was only half joking , with the NICU being the sterile environment that it was, with no glimmers of optimism or joy. "Ah, you don't know where you are anyway, of course you'll be happy enough in this place". Max contemplated how her age made it all so simple. "You'll be just fine while your old man here tends to some boring adult chores. I gotta was my clothes...pack my attire and dry clean that one shirt you vomited on. " Max meandered before typing a reminder into his phone . "Call Stanford . I'll have to resume my degree when we get home. Daddy's been so busy with your health issues he forgot about college." "And Elara... it's not as if I don't think about her, and how I walked away from her. Am I the asshole, leaving her well she seemed so torn? It doesn't matter , because it's you and me kiddo, and that's all there is to it. " Her next laugh rang out through the metallic halls , attracting the appreciative smiles of passing medical staff who called out as they steered antiseptic disposal bins, "ah, what a beautiful laugh , Miss Hawthorne!" Came a blustering voice, and the moment was a welcome change of pace. Max, propping her up on his lap, gently lifted her hand, guiding it in a wave that resembled the playful twist of a light bulb being screwed in . "Wave , princess, you have admirers it seems. Got some big shoes to fill huh? " Letting her arm fall back to her side, she flailed in excitement, grabbing at his shirt and scrunching it in her grasp. "You're really perking up, I waited so long for this..." . As his phone lit up with discharge instructions and digital flyers from various social service links , bombarding his eyes with all the information. It was an hour's drive to the airport, and his mind drifted to his earlier wrestle with Lily's car seat. At least it was roadworthy, if a little askew , her blanket stuffed into place so she'd be warm enough. Then the outstretched list of medications he needed to collect from the pharmacy gnawed at his fidgeting hands , as he turned his focus back to his overstimulated daughter, begging for his attention with her every manoeuvre. "Alright, alright, that's enough outta you, wriggler." His own laughter sprinkled over hers , interspersed and forming a harmonious sound that reverberated on the metal walls. Finally , he answered an incoming call from Sam, "Hey man, how've you been? Yeah , saw the photos , I'm happy for you all , man. Yeah she's being discharged in a couple of days. Nah, can't get my head around it either. But the day is nearly here . I'm glad to hear James and Maddy are doing so well. You take care ".
CHATBOT: , buddy. Alright, catch you later." Max ended the call. He glanced back down at Lily, whose eyes were starting to grow heavy. The lively energy from moments ago was giving way to the irresistible pull of sleep, her tiny eyelids fluttering as she fought the urge to doze off. Max smiled tenderly, knowing these quiet moments were just as precious as her vibrant laughter. "Time to get you tucked in for a bit, little champ," he whispered to her. He delicately adjusted her in his arms and rose from the chair, careful not to wake her. As he walked towards the room where Lily's crib awaited, he couldn't help but feel the weight of the solo journey he was about to undertake. The reality of single parenthood had seemed daunting initially, but as each day passed and Lily grew stronger and healthier, so did his resolve. Navigating through the bustling environment of the NICU, Max felt a pang of bittersweet nostalgia. This had been their home away from home for what felt like an eternity. The staff had become like a second family, and though he was eager to leave, part of him would miss the supportive embrace of this community. He reached the crib and gently laid Lily down, tucking her in with the soft blanket she'd come to favor. The steady rhythm of her breathing filled the space between the mechanical beeps and distant conversations. Before he turned to take care of the last-minute details of their departure, he paused, allowing himself a moment of reflection. Max realized that resilience took many forms - Lily's tiny, recovering body was one, his own journey, from the uncertainty as a new father to the confident caregiver, was another. The road ahead would be lined with challenges, no doubt, but as he looked at his daughter's peaceful face, he understood that their bond was the source of an incredible strength. Taking a deep breath, he turned away from the crib, silently vowing to be the guiding light Lily would need in the world beyond the NICU. There was much to do, but for now, Max found solace in the little victories - like Lily's laugh, the admirers she'd won over, and the thought that soon they would be starting a new chapter together in California. He pulled out his phone and checked off the tasks that lay ahead. Packing, sorting the medications, organizing the car seat - small steps on the path toward bringing Lily home. Each task on the list was a stepping stone to a future he had barely had the chance to dream of during the long nights by her side in the ...
CHATBOT: Max ended the call with a sense of finality. He placed the phone back into his pocket and exhaled, a long, measured breath to steady himself. The NICU's noises, the whispers of duty, the incessant rhythm of hospital life suddenly seemed to crescendo and then fade away as he centered himself back to the present, to his daughter. Lily was watching him, her bright eyes reflecting a mixture of innocence and undemanding love. In that gaze, Max found his solace and his purpose. No matter the tumult of his personal life, the hardships, the conflicting emotions about Elara, Lily remained his steadfast mission. The decision to part ways with Elara wasn't made lightly, and it left behind a tangled web of 'what-ifs' and 'could-have-beens'. However, Lily's journey from a preemie fighting for her life to a 'little cucumber' who could now laugh with such vivacity made all the prior choices seem inconsequential by comparison. He and Lily were a team, and though he couldn't shake off the thought of Elara completely, he knew his priority was the tiny human who needed him the most. With Lily's imminent discharge, the real challenges would soon begin. It wasn't just a matter of getting her home, but also the integration into the world outside these sanitized walls. There were medications to manage, follow-up appointments to keep, and the daunting task of resuming his studies while caring for her. He glanced around the NICU one more time, taking in the memories etched into every corner--the sleepless nights, the palpable anxiety following each medical update, and the joy over every small improvement Lily made. This sterile environment had been their battleground, and they were emerging victorious. Gathering up their belongings, Max placed Lily securely in her stroller, ensuring she was well-protected against the chilly hospital air. He made his way to the pharmacy, list in hand, ticking off each medication as it was handed to him. The pharmacists, too, offered their congratulations and well-wishes; they'd seen Lily's fight from the start and couldn't be happier for the duo. Once the car was packed and Lily was comfortably nestled in her seat, Max took one last look at the hospital. This chapter was closing, and a new one was beginning. The road ahead to California would be long, and not without its bumps, but he felt ready. He had learned to find joy in the hardships and laughter in the midst of tears--lessons only life in the NICU could teach. Driving away, with Lily's snore...