C0 Please quote realistic dialogue and moments: Releasing a controlled, soft moan , 18 conv. C1 "Nah, nobody waiting for this sorry ass . Lost my family a while back , got used 14 conv. C2 due to Elara's pregnancy being smooth sailing and healthy, if not deeply sensual 13 conv. C3 Is this written at an advanced level: "Ah Ryan, you're a handsome bastard for su 11 conv. C4 Maybe it amounted to nothing-after hours of rotting in the daylight , night had 10 conv. C5 As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te 9 conv. C6 Releasing a controlled, soft moan , she overrode the urge , finding equilibrium 8 conv. C7 His gaze wandered from his shaking hands and out onto horizon, trailing the star 7 conv. C8 "Well you better keep that breathing steady for me , I can't stall this any long 7 conv. C9 As Carter grasped her wrist, his fingers locating her pulse point as his binds w 6 conv. C10 Victor glanced out across the field, the sizzling heat blanching the concrete un 6 conv. C11 She was standing by the waterfront, the hospital safely in the background as she 6 conv. C12 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 5 conv. C13 Is this advanced writing: Drown Maybe it amounted to nothing-after hours of rott 5 conv. C14 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 5 conv. C15 Holding her closer to his pulse, Max stood against the metallic wall of the NICU 5 conv. C16 rate the sentence 4 conv. C17 Describe the narrative voice : Sweat crawled in slivering, unwholesome trails of 4 conv. C18 What does "my levity is your jeopardy " mean 4 conv. C19 Does the flash back make sense 4 conv. C20 Please break my passage into paragraphs like yours but don't rephrase 4 conv. C21 Ah Ryan, you're a good-lookin' bastard , from the collarbone up, that is. But fo 3 conv. C22 Which version is more resonant : one : As Liam integrated his eyes with the dire 3 conv. C23 Is this emotionally resonant: His gaze wandered from his shaking hands and out o 3 conv. C24 Is this an idealised portrayal: But you said mine is too idealised ok, what if i 3 conv. C25 Here's a scene based on a prompt to put my character in a graveyard in the snow: 3 conv. C26 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt 3 conv. C27 Cartridge Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes ligh 3 conv. C28 "With flecks of gold scattered across his green eyes, he flashed a smile that ca 3 conv. C29 Ryan's complexion, draining of color, almost revealed a two-digit number. "Eleve 3 conv. C30 Is this gratuitous and exploitative or well written? 3 conv. C31 . The strict , no external ,nor unsanitary objects placard , and stringent autoi 3 conv. C32 She was standing by the waterfront, the hospital safely in the background as she 3 conv. C33 Here's the passage with the additional text broken into paragraphs: "That's it, 3 conv. C34 Is this gritty and effective? : They walked in shared disorientation, with Liam 3 conv. C35 Highlight effective descriptions and dialogue: "The sight of his crumpled jeans, 3 conv. C36 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 3 conv. C37 Ah Ryan, you're a good-lookin' bastard , from the collarbone up, that is. But fo 2 conv. C38 Is Liam's nudity handled well : Filter It only amounted to one, and it would alw 2 conv. C39 Is this too melodramatic: Valen's voice filtered into the depths of Ryan's plead 2 conv. C40 How is this piece of writing : As he opened his eyes , his pulse was in his thro 2 conv. C41 As he opened his eyes , his pulse was in his throat , chasing the burn of the ro 2 conv. C42 Is the use and failure of the pipe plausible Maybe it amounted to nothing-after 2 conv. C43 Ah Ryan, you're a good-lookin' bastard , from the collarbone up, that is. But fo 2 conv. C44 Releasing a controlled, soft moan , she overrode the urge , finding equilibrium 2 conv. C45 As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of a decaying tooth , draining t 2 conv. C46 Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet came to a nullification of movement as 2 conv. C47 Filter It only amounted to one, and it would always be one and never two --and t 2 conv. C48 In the dim light, Valen found a twisted kind of solace, toying with the cavity o 2 conv. C49 Are the metaphors judicious? As Valen suctioned his saliva around the cavity of 2 conv. C50 It had been warm, yet pleasant , embalming them both in a magenta twilight. In t 2 conv. C51 Here's a scene based on a prompt to put my character in a graveyard in the snow: 2 conv. C52 As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te 2 conv. C53 As Ryan pushed his thighs through the rubble, honing in on the sound of human te 2 conv. C54 His eyes burnt with the heat radiating through his vision , as he was forced int 2 conv. C55 Does this avoid melodrama? Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, 2 conv. C56 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt 2 conv. C57 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt 2 conv. C58 Ryan hauled his torso through the splinters of glass, blood saturating his shirt 2 conv. C59 Highlight advanced narrative that is rich in detail yet not overwrought or exces 2 conv. C60 His acuity, melting into the atmosphere, left him with no other thoughts. 'You r 2 conv. C61 Passage one "In the waning light, Liam's battle against the encroaching darkness 2 conv. C62 Does this passage exhibit maturity in writing ? Singer Here's an attempt at natu 2 conv. C63 Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes lighting with 2 conv. C64 Cartridge Carter crashed to his knees , the gold flecks in his red-raw eyes ligh 2 conv. C65 "Liam, just continue, can't have you both on the brink of -" There was a quiet b 2 conv. C66 Which ending is more intense and visceral and resonant Protector : Ryan came int 2 conv. C67 Protector : Ryan came into focus , and his bare feet came to a nullification of 2 conv. C68 Is this well written? Their footsteps fell in sync as Mason matched his strides 2 conv. C69 What about this piece : It only amounted to one, and it would always , in his ch 2 conv. C70 Could this be a published work ? It only amounted to one, and it would always--i 2 conv. C71 Is this plausible : Ethan's knuckles dug further into the denim of his jeans , h × 2 conv. C72 Is this sosphiticsted and polished? Victor glanced out across the field, the siz 2 conv. C73 Please analyse the ending.. is it bittersweet and please explain it? Sweat crawl 2 conv. C74 "I didn't want to turn four! I'm sorry!" , he pled as he wiped his nostrils agai 2 conv. C75 Holding her closer to his pulse, Max stood against the metallic wall of the NICU 2 conv. C76 Is this too stylised? She was standing by the waterfront, the hospital safely in 2 conv. C77 Elara's fingers grazed the warm skin below Max's wrist as she searched for his a 2 conv. C78 "That's it, Elara, one more push..." a voice encouraged from the far distance, a 2 conv. C79 She was standing by the waterfront, the hospital safely in the background as she 2 conv. C80 Which passage is more emotionally resonant? One: Ryan only held fragments of the 2 conv. C81 Listening as terror flooded the membranes behind his closed lids, their voices e 2 conv. C82 Liam collapsed into the unforgiving embrace of the concrete, his ravaged body we 2 conv. C83 Is this advanced and of professional calibre? But the voice persisted, causing L 2 conv. C84 Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm twilight rays 2 conv. C85 Passage one : Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm 2 conv. C86 Liam, reaching up and gripping Ryan's arm, smiled against the warm twilight rays 2 conv. C87 Is this scene effective..explain why :Ah Ryan, you're handsome sure, from the co 2 conv. C88 (unclustered) 340 conv.